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Weather Eye, by kageygirl, for the Blood challenge

attempting to sneak it in...

Title: Weather Eye
Author: [info]kageygirl
Rating: PG
Category: Gen
Spoiler: "The Storm/The Eye", minor for "Hot Zone"
Summary: Radek should have followed that thought through to the logical conclusion, but he'd been too busy.


Weather Eye

Radek Zelenka pushed his hair out of his eyes as he ran yet another diagnostic on the power control system. In the month since the storm had struck the city, the weather had turned warmer and quite humid, taxing the environmental controls. Today, the control room was almost stiflingly hot, as the heat migrated up the tower from the lower levels, and the nonessential personnel had been sent away to work elsewhere.

His console gave a discouraging beep, and Radek sighed, and took off his glasses to rub a hand across his sweaty face.

"Is that thing still acting up?"

Putting his glasses back on, Radek looked across at Rodney, who was trying to convince the environmental controls to cooperate. Rodney had not taken a break in several hours, and he seemed to be running on an uncommonly good-natured burst of stubbornness. Radek said, "I have run the diagnostic seven times, and six times the numbers have not matched any of the previous scans. I am beginning to suspect that it is a clever game intended to drive me mad."

"Mmm." Rodney looked up from the laptop perched on top of his own console, and pointed his chin at Radek's. "Before you start padding the walls of your room, crack open the casing. Maybe the problem's not in the system, but in the console itself."

"I was hoping not to have to move around that much." Radek blotted the sweat off his upper lip with his shirt sleeve, and Rodney gave him a quick smirk before focusing on the laptop again.

Radek was still not certain why Rodney was apparently undisturbed by the heat, when everyone else was in a bad temper. Even Dr. Weir had seemed out of sorts earlier, when she'd come to inquire about their progress. Radek had a recurring theory about Rodney having been designed by the universe as a source of irritation when ambient levels were too low, which certainly explained his current relatively good mood. But it seemed uncharitable to work on the proofs while Rodney was temporarily one of the more civil people in the city.

Of course, such idle speculation did nothing but suggest that Radek's brain was in actual danger of melting, so he took a deep breath and retrieved his maintenance kit from the floor by his feet. With the proper tools, the facing of the console came loose easily, and Radek swore in Czech as he peered into the inner workings with a flashlight.

"What is it?"

Radek turned back to see Rodney frowning at him with concern, and Radek waved him away. "It is nothing. I merely have to kill one or more people, and then we will have many fewer problems."

"As long as we don't need them, be my guest," Rodney said, and Radek chuckled before turning back to the console.

It seemed as though someone had spilled something into the console, and of course they hadn't bothered to let anyone know when it could have been cleaned up quickly and before it had caused their current difficulties. Now, the heat and humidity were causing it to interfere with the control crystals. Radek pulled out the cleaning rod and patches that he had originally liberated from a gun-cleaning kit, and saturated a patch with rubbing alcohol before fixing it to the rod and swabbing at the faint brownish stain coating some of the crystals.

When he exchanged the used patch for a clean one, Radek examined the patch to see what it was he'd cleaned away, and his hands went still.

He'd been thinking it was coffee or tea, but the stain on the white cotton patch had a rusty, reddish tint. Radek couldn't help glancing back at Rodney, head bent over the environmental controls console, muttering in a sing-song tone as he typed.

After the storm had passed over Atlantis, Radek had returned with the first damage control team. They'd been given a minimum of details over the radio about the Genii attack, and when Radek had taken over for Rodney that day, he knew little more than what he observed when he arrived back in the city. This seat had been damp, and there had been dull spots where water had dried on the console. Radek should have followed that through to the logical conclusion about water dripping inside the casing, but he'd been too busy not paying attention to--

"Finally. Thank you," Rodney said, and Radek heard a whoosh as the ventilation system came on high, blowing cool air into the room. As he stood up, Rodney ostentatiously brushed his hands together. "You know, all those balconies and overlooks and terraces are fine when you've got ZPMs to power the life support system, but I'm starting to wish the Ancients had been a little less artistic and a little more energy-efficient."

"I will make a note of that, for when we design our own city that is supposed to last for millions of years."

"Good. Do that." Rodney waved a hand in Radek's direction. "You need help over there?"

"No, no." Radek dropped the stained patch into his kit, out of sight, and started with the new one, looking away from Rodney as he cleaned the last of the blood away from the casing. Rodney had not been too badly hurt that day, and the rainwater he'd been soaked in had thinned what little had run into the console, but Radek wanted to remove all traces of it. He was careful to wipe up even the streaks that were nowhere near the circuitry.

He looked up as Rodney stopped nearby, and shook his head quickly. "It's nothing, really--someone was careless with their coffee, I suspect."

Rodney rolled his eyes. "Which should be grounds for denying them rations, except that Elizabeth refuses to see it my way."

Radek replaced the console facing and triggered another diagnostic. "In addition to damaging to the irreplaceable Ancient technology, it's a criminal waste of valuable resources."

"Exactly my point." Rodney turned and walked over to Dr. Weir's office, presumably to deliver the news that the control room was once again fit for human habitation, and Radek was thoughtful as he watched him go.

The day of the storm, Radek had concentrated on ignoring the dark stain on Rodney's right sleeve, because Rodney had seemed to want to do the same. Now that Radek thought about it, though, it was possible that he'd been just as happy as Rodney not to discuss his injury.

It was easier to resist the occasional urge to strangle Rodney if Radek thought of the man as an impersonal, natural phenomenon. But most natural phenomena had the decency not to ruin the effect by bleeding all over the city they were trying to keep from sinking, or asking to be remembered for saving groups of children.

Radek's diagnostic ended on an affirmative beep, pulling him away from his musings, and he finished packing away his kit just as Rodney returned.

Rodney crossed his arms and said loftily, "As a reward for our valiant efforts, I think we should rescue a few cups of coffee from the possibility of being ignominiously wasted."

Despite the not-yet-dissipated heat, Radek smiled in agreement. "That is an excellent suggestion."

"Thank you." They set off, and before they'd even reached the Gate room floor, Rodney had started in on an idea he had for improving the efficiency of the air filtration system, and Radek found himself responding with his own thoughts, before he'd even really articulated them in his own mind.

Rodney did not seem to have noticed Radek's bemusement, but then, forces of nature were not supposed to be concerned with such things.

Radek didn't mind. He simply nodded in response to Rodney's good ideas, disagreed with the bad ones, and allowed Rodney's enthusiasm to sweep him along in its wake.
Tags: author: kageygirl, challenge: bloody

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[info]aithine

May 5 2005, 16:00:00 UTC 7 years ago

::snerk:: Rodney definitely is a force of nature. *vbg* Lovely insights from Zelenka, m'dear.

[info]sffan

May 5 2005, 22:55:54 UTC 7 years ago

LOVE that icon.

[info]aithine

7 years ago

[info]kageygirl

7 years ago

[info]sethoz

May 5 2005, 16:03:57 UTC 7 years ago

Definitely Hurricane Rodney. *beg* Loved this nice insight into Radek's thoughts and how he wants to think of Rodney as just a misrable little man. ;) And so funny that Rodney is nice when everyone else is in a bad mood.

[info]_inbetween_

May 5 2005, 16:04:24 UTC 7 years ago

He must be a libra ...

[info]kageygirl

7 years ago

[info]_inbetween_

May 5 2005, 16:03:59 UTC 7 years ago

You make those two go along together so well :) And a nice use of blood *glances at own keyboard warily* *ponders forces of nature more*

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 19:40:50 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you--I'm glad you liked it. *g*

[info]umbo

May 5 2005, 16:03:59 UTC 7 years ago

Nice job.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 19:42:25 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you!

[info]daughtershade

May 5 2005, 16:23:19 UTC 7 years ago

Oh nice. From the beginning, I've wondered why Radek seems to just deal with Rodney's more glaring qualities, and this is a nice explination. Also, I love the insight of Radek seeing Rodney deeper than just appearances. I think that goes hand in hand with the progression of their friendship through season one. Nice job.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 19:43:47 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you so much!

I love your icon, btw. *g*

[info]fenris_wolf0

May 5 2005, 16:43:46 UTC 7 years ago

Oh I liked this! Excellent point of view... :)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 19:44:33 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you so much! *g*

[info]coreopsis

May 5 2005, 16:55:56 UTC 7 years ago

But most natural phenomena had the decency not to ruin the effect by bleeding all over the city they were trying to keep from sinking, or asking to be remembered for saving groups of children.
hee. I really, really love your Zelenka voice. It's wonderful. :-)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 19:46:10 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thank you! I love him, but he feels difficult to grasp in my head, so I'm glad he sounded all right. *g*

[info]teand

May 5 2005, 17:36:03 UTC 7 years ago

Radek is definitely becoming one of my favorite characters. Thanks for a lovely, quiet look inside.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 19:54:55 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you--I'm glad you liked it. *g*

[info]thegrrrl2002

May 5 2005, 17:51:49 UTC 7 years ago

Oooooh, you are so fabulous.

Thank you for this. It's a delight. I love Radek's POV, and his frustration/affection for Rodney. It's perfect.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:00:53 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thank you so much, Grrrl. They're just so damn cute together. *g*

[info]_bettina_

May 5 2005, 18:13:40 UTC 7 years ago

This is great. Radek has Rodney figured out. Hee.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:02:28 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks--glad you liked it!

[info]mmmchelle

May 5 2005, 18:23:55 UTC 7 years ago

It's official. I'm in love with you.

Just thought I should let you know.

[info]miera_c

May 5 2005, 18:38:27 UTC 7 years ago

yeah yeah, get in line. ;)

I liked the Zelenka POV. Particularly since there are no words missing from his spoken lines < /pet peeve >. Also the way he thought of Rodney as a force of nature. *g*

[info]agentotter

7 years ago

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[info]agentotter

May 5 2005, 18:39:10 UTC 7 years ago

Okay, that was FOR AWESOME. Rodney and Zelenka and it's gen and beautiful and they're so snarky and funny and cute and omg you rule. Will you write more of these sorts of thing? Like lots and lots? You can dedicate them to me if you want. I won't mind. ;)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:12:15 UTC 7 years ago

LOL! Thanks! *g* Okay, so it's clearly for you that I had these whole segments of backstory that got cut and are trying to convince me that I should stick them together and do The Storm/The Eye from Zelenka's POV.

[info]sivib

May 5 2005, 18:57:57 UTC 7 years ago

Very nice and very subtle. Good voices, too. I like Rodney in this, the mellower side we don't see a lot of. It makes him more complex. And I love your Zalenka voice. *applause* and thank you

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:12:55 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thank you so! I'm really glad you liked it. *g*

[info]cynnamon37

May 5 2005, 19:14:15 UTC 7 years ago

Yep, I agree with everything everyone else said. You have their voices and even their mannerisms down perfectly, and underneath it all...that bit about Radek wanting to remove all traces of when Rodney was bleeding...very subtle, and very touching. You must never stop writing, if these are the results.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:19:02 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it, and I'm really touched. Thanks. *g*

[info]the_moonmoth

May 5 2005, 19:30:58 UTC 7 years ago

Radek had a recurring theory about Rodney having been designed by the universe as a source of irritation when ambient levels were too low

*g* You could be on to something there.

Lovely little fic. You really got across Radek's mild sense of humour and antagonism with regards to Rodney. Sweet. Good job :)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:19:37 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it. *g*

[info]ophidiae

May 5 2005, 20:09:03 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, nicely done. You write good Zelenka.

Wow, that sounded lame. I'm afraid that's about as insightful as I'm capable of at the moment, given I spent the afternoon drinking beer with my co-workers in honor of Cinco de Mayo. Just pretend I came up with a clever and witty way of saying, "I really, really liked this." :-)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:21:45 UTC 7 years ago

LOL! I fully support the ceremonial consumption of liquor, and I take the compliment in the spirit in which it was intended. Thank you very much. *g*

[info]grey_bard

May 5 2005, 20:16:50 UTC 7 years ago

My brain is currently fried from too many class papers too quickly, so I don't have anything clever to say, but I just really liked it. Both characters were well drawn.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:22:49 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you--I'm glad you liked it!

[info]teaphile

May 5 2005, 20:39:18 UTC 7 years ago

What excellent insight into both Zelenka and McKay.

"I merely have to kill one or more people, and then we will have many fewer problems."

That's ironic, in retrospect.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:30:29 UTC 7 years ago

That's ironic, in retrospect.

I skew that way, sometimes. *g* Thanks--I'm glad you liked it!

[info]spikedluv

May 5 2005, 20:40:52 UTC 7 years ago

I like! I'm enjoying Zelenka more and more, especially now that I'm getting to see his introduction in the earlier eps, that I kinda sorta missed when I quit watching because of my Weir/Teyla issues. Which now that I know better, was soooo stupid. *g* Anyway, lovely story. I love the Rodney & Zelenka moments, both in your fic and in canon, especially when Rodney says stuff like, "no, no, you admitted I'm smarter", and Zelenka says, "you are a miserable little man". *g* I liked seeing Rodney from Zelenka's view, and the fact that he got another piece to add to his Rodney-puzzle. (And if it makes any different, I liked your take on Zelenka. *g*)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:32:43 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thank you kindly! I love Zelenka, too, and I think his canon moments with Rodney are so great, because they're just cute and brilliant and pissy all at once.

I'm so glad you liked it!

[info]karendreamer

May 5 2005, 21:14:41 UTC 7 years ago

I'll just add to everyone else's praises. This is funny and real and wonderful.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:33:15 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you so much!

[info]rosewildeirish

May 5 2005, 21:23:03 UTC 7 years ago

Lovely, just lovely.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:33:37 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you very much!

[info]maching_monkey

May 5 2005, 21:27:13 UTC 7 years ago

That was really cool. I thought Zelenka's voice was excellent, as was the unique plot idea. I loved Zelenka's thoughts about Rodney--the surprise and the sadness, and the bemused affection. I really enjoyed it.

Leah

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:36:33 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks, sweetie! I suspect my adoration for both of them is showing, but they're so cool together.

::hugs you just because::

[info]randommagic

May 5 2005, 21:38:24 UTC 7 years ago

Nice insights into both Zelenka and Rodney. I loved Zelenka's quiet observations and Rodney being completely oblivious, and the two of them batting ideas off of each other at the end. :)

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:37:15 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you--I'm so glad you liked it!

[info]jenlev

May 5 2005, 22:52:48 UTC 7 years ago

bwahaha! "But it seemed uncharitable to work on the proofs while Rodney was temporarily one of the more civil people in the city." i like how radek has kept a firm grip on logic.

oh wonderful how radek's recognition of the blood is layered with the continued banter with rodney. that's beautifully balanced.

and yes to this sentence: "Now that Radek thought about it, though, it was possible that he'd been just as happy as Rodney not to discuss his injury."

you've written radek and rodney so very clear, and the tone of radek's internal voice feels perfect.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:43:15 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, thanks, Jen! I'm so glad you liked it--I think Radek and Rodney have such a great dynamic onscreen, but I was kind of nervous about getting Radek's voice right. Thank you! *g*

[info]jenlev

7 years ago

[info]zortified

May 5 2005, 22:55:15 UTC 7 years ago

Like this a lot. Very interesting to see into Radek's head, and see his thoughts on Rodney and the whole situation. And I like how protective he was - not saying that it was blood that had caused the problem.

[info]kageygirl

May 8 2005, 20:45:16 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you! I really liked Radek in "Hot Zone," when he could tell that Rodney was hallucinating but didn't say anything, and was so gentle with him when he thought he was about to die.
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