Cesperanza ([info]cesperanza) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,

First Night Challenge by Speranza

Title: Just Like Christmas
Author: Speranza
Pairing: Sheppard/McKay



Just Like Christmas
by Speranza

"Go to bed, Rodney." Weir's words had floated over a yawn. "It'll all still be here tomorrow."

Rodney had glanced sharply to the side and seen her feet drifting toward the door; he'd been underneath the systems console at the time, just checking for himself that the power coupling could sustain the increased pressure of the additional conduits they were adding for their own equipment.

"Yeah, in a minute," he'd replied. He'd even meant it at the time.

"Are you still here?" Some time later, Grodin was standing there. "Really, you should get some sleep."

Rodney just nodded, tapping his fingers as he waited for the diagnostic to finish. "Two more minutes and I'm out of here. They assigned me a room in the south tower somewhere." When he looked up again, Grodin had taken off, apparently taking his sudden interest in Atlantean real estate as a sign of good faith.

Sometime after that, Beckett did a near-perfect double take, first looking at Rodney and then his watch and then Rodney again. "Rodney--for God's sake!"

"Yeah, I--yeah," and he hadn't thought his inability to produce coherent sentences had meant anything, though probably his nonessential systems had been shutting down to conserve power. "I'm gonna--maybe in ten--or, uh--"

"Go to bed, man!" Beckett's forehead was creased with worry--but really, what else was new? "You're dead on your feet!"

"I'm fine. I'm-- almost done with--uh--" and he'd been saved by the sudden bleep that meant that Beckett was needed again in the infirmary, where apparently there had been any number of people who'd been suffering from allergic reactions or stress-related illnesses. Rodney would have put out a bucket of inhalers and a sign saying, "Deal with it," but Beckett apparently felt that each case needed the personal touch.

It didn't seem very long at all before a very chipper looking Ford came in and said, "Hey, Doc; I didn't know you were fielding early shift," and then Ford must have gotten a good look at him because he recoiled, raising his arms to protect his face and said, "Whoa, okay. No coffee yet?"

Ford brought him a cup of coffee, and truth be told, he did feel much better.

"Doc-tor Mc-Kay," and okay, all four syllables meant he was busted, and he tried to come up with some story about how what he'd been doing was directly related to saving the universe, or base security, or something even remotely important--except he'd mainly been fucking around. Not that he was a slave to the truth or anything, but his normally agile brain wouldn't even generate the garden-variety lies that he depended on to get him from one minute to another.

And Weir was glaring at him, arms crossed over her chest.

"Uh," Rodney said, wincing.

"Go to bed, Rodney. Now. That's a direct order," she said, and so out he went.

* * *


He wandered around the south tower until found his room--or at least a room that he was pretty sure was his room, and that was pretty interesting too. He inspected the closets and outlets and the lights on the tables and the bathroom--and then a panel slid open in what Rodney presumed was his kitchenette and a soothing voice scared the shit out of him by asking him if he wanted a hot drink before bed.

Freaking out suddenly, Rodney made a beeline for the glass doors that fronted onto the balcony. He wanted some fresh air. The sun was fully up, now, and the water was blue and silver, sparkling. He took a deep breath and felt new and invigorated. He wondered if he could take a shower and change his clothes and just pretend to have slept.

He turned back toward the door, this idea nearly driving him back inside-- and it was only then that he noticed that someone had dragged a mattress out onto the balcony next to his. Moreover, there seemed to be a heap of black rags piled on the mattress. Frowning, Rodney approached the dividing wall to get a better look-- and suddenly the black rags moved and uncoiled and sat up, groggily.

It was Major Sheppard.

"Whoa," Sheppard said, and blinked.

"Hey," Rodney replied; Noel Coward this wasn't, but still, it paid to be nice to your neighbors. He had a sudden pang of longing for his cat, who was no doubt curled up on Maggie's sofa as she watched the forty-eighth rerun of Murder She Wrote. Fucking cat. Couldn't trust 'em. One can of tuna fish, and they were yours for the taking.

"I can't sleep," Sheppard said, and that was kind of ridiculous, since he'd just been asleep, or at least his every-which-way hairstyle seemed to indicate so. "Sleep cycle totally off," he added, slicing his hand in an emphatic gesture that he'd probably learned in military school, maybe to launch planes or something.

"Yeah. Know what you mean," Rodney said, although he didn't really, not having had a normal sleep cycle himself since graduate school. He put his hands onto the low, thickish wall, having had some vague idea of just hopping over in a graceful, "Anyone for tennis?" kind of way, but actually he had to hoist one leg over and then roll on his belly, hugging the wall, until his foot touched the ground on Sheppard's side, and then kind of hop until he could pull his other leg down again. Less hopping would have been good.

He sat down on the mattress and leaned back against the apartment wall the way Sheppard was doing. "So listen--"

"I'm listening," Sheppard said, tilting his head to the side.

Goddamned literalist. Sometimes he really didn't know what to do with people who weren't abstract thinkers. He leaned forward a little bit, in confidence, and Sheppard's dark head moved to meet him half way.

"Did the coffee machine talk to you?"

To Rodney's extreme relief, Sheppard nodded solemnly. "Yeah."

"Okay, good." He felt a distinct lightness in his chest. "I thought maybe it was just me."

Sheppard shrugged. "You can turn it off."

"Oh yeah? How?" Rodney asked.

Sheppard was staring straight ahead and blinking slowly, like the question was taking up all of his processing power; actually, he did look really, really tired. Finally he turned, eyebrows raised, and said, "Actually, maybe you can't turn it off. I can turn it off." Sheppard raised his hand, solemnly, like an Indian. "I have the hand of power."

"Okay, so I will love you forever if you can make sure the goddamned thing never, ever talks to me again." Rodney closed his eyes and began to massage his aching temples.

"Forever?" Sheppard repeated. "That's kind of a long time."

"How long do you want?"

He'd been kidding, but Sheppard seemed to answer him seriously. "I dunno. Figure…twenty minutes?"

Rodney opened his eyes, and yeah, Sheppard still looked pretty serious. Well, all of him except his hair, which was ludicrously flat on one side and pointing straight up on the other. "I'm sorry, you mean--"

"I'm on an alien world," Sheppard said flatly, and suddenly Rodney understood that Sheppard's reasons for not sleeping weren't the same as his own reasons for not sleeping. He was almost out of his damn mind with excitement; he had a galaxy of new toys to play with. Sheppard, though, didn't look excited. "In a flying city. Where the coffee machines talk." He stopped for a moment, and gnawed thoughtfully at his lower lip, the gesture making him look somehow four years old. "Nobody even knows I'm missing."

"Yeah," Rodney said quietly, not knowing what else to say. "I know what--"

Sheppard just kept talking, like he hadn't said anything important. "So something--familiar--would be kind of a good thing right now." Sheppard looked at him, and Rodney just stared back at him, and thought: He isn't. He isn't--is he?

It didn’t help any that his brain was so tired. He sat there for a moment, heart pounding with nerves, then decided to take a chance. "And the sleep-inducing properties wouldn't hurt either, I'm guessing," he said in his most wisecracking voice, hoping for some thin veneer of plausible deniability.

But Sheppard's expression--an open, glorious smile--made any self-protection redundant. "Right. Yeah. You understand perfectly," and then he squeezed his eyes shut and moaned, "Christ, I need some sleep…"

It felt safer, somehow, with Sheppard's eyes closed. Rodney hesitantly--and stupidly, reaching out and pulling back and then reaching out again--pressed his hand to Sheppard's chest just below the shoulder. The skin below the thin black t-shirt was hard and warm. "I, uh--I won't make it over the wall again."

Sheppard opened his eyes. "Got a mattress right here," he said, and Rodney couldn't argue with that.

The most awkward part of it was the first kiss, when Sheppard bent forward and for a moment Rodney didn't know whether to lean left or lean right and instead just bobbled from side to side until Sheppard grabbed him by the open neck of his shirt and pulled their mouths together.

After that, it was all easy enough--and almost familiar, kind of--lying back with a hand in his pants, his fingers closing around an erect cock. Except normally, it was his own hand on his own cock. He gasped as he felt Sheppard's broad thumb stroking the lip of his cockhead, and he tightened his own hand, pulling and squeezing in his own favorite rhythm. Sheppard, rather gratifyingly, let out a long, desperate-sounding moan just as his cock jerked in Rodney's hand, and Rodney somehow managed enough presence of mind to keep stroking even though his own orgasm was rapidly approaching. Lot of great new toys here on Atlantis.

Sheppard heaved out a few, panting breaths and gasped, "Excellent," before rolling onto his back and falling into a deep, open-mouthed sleep. Rodney lay there for a moment, dimly aware that Sheppard's hand was still deep in his pants, before drifting off himself.

When the sun finally set, neither of them was awake yet to see it.


END (1700 words)

Tags: author: speranza, challenge: first night

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[info]verstehen

March 6 2005, 07:21:41 UTC 7 years ago

"I have the hand of power."

Classic!

Don't take this the wrong way, but reading this made me even more tired than I already am. Good job. ;)

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:21:07 UTC 7 years ago

Uh, thanks--I think? *g* I'm hoping this means that there was something realistic about the exhaustion, not that I bored you silly. *g* Thanks for commenting!

[info]verstehen

7 years ago

[info]farwing

March 6 2005, 07:44:36 UTC 7 years ago

I should be asleep. Instead I am reasing this. But I think I'll go to sleep now. Erg...not coherant. Sorry.

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:21:41 UTC 7 years ago

It's okay!--it's a perfectly reasonable response to a story about being sleepy. *g* Hope you liked!

[info]farwing

7 years ago

[info]merryish

March 6 2005, 07:54:02 UTC 7 years ago

Man, you had me right off the bat, but this is where I fell in love:

It didn't seem very long at all before a very chipper looking Ford came in and said, "Hey, Doc; I didn't know you were fielding early shift," and then Ford must have gotten a good look at him because he recoiled, raising his arms to protect his face and said, "Whoa, okay. No coffee yet?"

Such a cool one-two punch of Ford and McKay characterization; I bought into both of them right there.

And this:

"Okay, so I will love you forever if you can make sure the goddamned thing never, ever talks to me again."

I may now have nightmares about talking coffeemakers. If there's any appliance anywhere that *shouldn't* talk to people, it's the coffee machines, man. Talking coffee machines would just be adding injury to insult. And yet I can buy the Ancients having them, because there's something about those people that just wasn't right, dude. :: shudder ::

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:22:51 UTC 7 years ago

Talking coffee machines would just be adding injury to insult.

Yeah, totally; shutting up is just what you'd want!

And hey, we did it, we did it! First story posted--high-five!

[info]ex_danvers514

March 6 2005, 13:41:50 UTC 7 years ago

Sometime after that, Beckett did a near-perfect double take, first looking at Rodney and then his watch and then Rodney again. "Rodney--for God's sake!"

Loved that part the most. Very cool fic.

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:23:56 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks so much! I appreciate it! Writing in a new fandom is a terrifying thing, so I'm happy to know I was even in the yard. Yay!

[info]daughtershade

March 6 2005, 14:46:35 UTC 7 years ago

McKay and Shep as neighbors.... hmmm that'd be interesting. Lovely as usual. Silly boys. :D

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:25:03 UTC 7 years ago

Yeah, it does have a sad, sick sitcom feeling, doesn't it? *g* Anyway, thanks!--glad you liked it.

[info]history_gurl

March 6 2005, 15:19:05 UTC 7 years ago

Ooooh, such a Rodney.

Goddamned literalist. Sometimes he really didn't know what to do with people who weren't abstract thinkers.

That somehow says it all, doesn't it?

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:26:47 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks a lot for this comment--since this my first try at these characters I'm frankly glad to be somewhere in the realm of characterization. I really appreciate the encouragement!

[info]maryavatar

March 6 2005, 15:44:55 UTC 7 years ago

Really good characterisations there, I could hear them both perfectly. And sex on the first night! So hard to do well while in character, but there it is... you did it.

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:32:37 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks so much--this is my first shot in SGA, and I have that new fandom terror.

Vis a vis sex on the first night--I always like to play with the idea that, wow, what if it were no big deal? (That's not my only idea, god knows, but it's a card I like to keep in the deck, trot out every once in a while. Especially since my natural inclination is to create wildly bizarre and elaborate situations. It's good to remember that-- A: "Hey, let's fuck." B: (glances at watch) "Yeah, okay."--pretty much does it most of the time.

Anonymous

7 years ago

[info]spikedluv

March 6 2005, 16:10:05 UTC 7 years ago

Love your characterization of Rodney not being able to stop playing with his new toys, and being freaked by the talking coffee machine, lol. John not being able to sleep because they were in a new galaxy was a nice insight, and the hand of power made me laugh. Oh, as did Rodney 'rolling' over the dividing wall, even though he could picture himself jumping over it! Nice imagery. And John being perfectly okay with Rodney not being able to get back over the wall...after. *g* Very nicely done!!

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:33:27 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you, thank you. Much appreciated! I'm a first time SG-A writer, so I'm delighted and greatly encouraged!

[info]carolyn_claire

March 6 2005, 16:33:27 UTC 7 years ago

He put his hands onto the low, thickish wall, having had some vague idea of just hopping over in a graceful, "Anyone for tennis?" kind of way,

*snort* From the image of crisp whites and straw boater to the awkward, graceless belly-roll over the wall--bwah! Perfect complement to Sheppard's bedhead. *g*

Exhaustion is much like drunkenness, I think; both impair your judgement and make you want to lie down, sometimes with whoever's handy. ;) Truly excellent.

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:35:06 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks so much! I'm very grateful for the encouragement (I have a touch of that "new fandom" terror. *g*) And you're right about exhaustion and drunkenness--it makes me want to propose a drunkeness challenge! All that drunk, sleepy Sheppard...yum.

[info]thegrrrl2002

March 6 2005, 16:56:27 UTC 7 years ago

Lovely stuff. The hop over the balcony wall that wasn't quite a hop, I just loved that. And John so not-thrilled about being there, both of them so tired, their defenses down--I could just feel it. I really enjoyed this.

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:36:31 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you so much! It's my (nervous squeak) first time actually trying out the voices myself and so I'm very grateful people are liking it and being so encouraging. I think there's a bigger story in John's first night, too--he didn't really have very long to adapt to this situation, did he?

[info]moonlettuce

March 6 2005, 16:57:24 UTC 7 years ago

"I have the hand of power."

Hee!

And the talking coffee machine *grin*

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:37:59 UTC 7 years ago


He does have the hand of power, though! Two of them, actually--shit, that's the punchline I didn't think of. *g*

And I bet that there are talking coffee machines. We just don't see them on the show because ol' Power Hands turned them all off. ; )

Cheers and thanks for commenting!

[info]_bettina_

March 6 2005, 18:45:40 UTC 7 years ago

Ohh, very nice. Rodney and his new toys, of course he couldn't just go to sleep ;-).

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:40:20 UTC 7 years ago

Of course not! How could he? Toys! Stuff! Even the light switches on an alien planet would be interesting; you'd need an orgasm or a mallet to the brain, methinks! (And orgasms are more fun to write about. ;) )

Cheers and thanks for commenting!

[info]misspamela

March 6 2005, 18:50:08 UTC 7 years ago

having had some vague idea of just hopping over in a graceful, "Anyone for tennis?" kind of way, but actually he had to hoist one leg over and then roll on his belly, hugging the wall, until his foot touched the ground on Sheppard's side, and then kind of hop until he could pull his other leg down again. Less hopping would have been good.

Bwah! I have such a clear mental image of this, and Rodney's slightly chagrined expression right afterwards.

And- YAY that you're writing Atlantis! Whee!

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:41:39 UTC 7 years ago

YAY, except it's really kind of terrifying. New voices! Technobabble! Weird aliens! Definitely a change of pace.

(I'm also writing a DS flashfiction right now, so I'm not going anywhere. So far, knock wood, these guys seem to coexist simultanously in my head!! I hope they keep playing nice and sticking to their respective worlds and such!)

[info]misspamela

7 years ago

[info]nestra

March 7 2005, 03:27:39 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, man, I'm so stoked that I can't get much beyond "Yay!"

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:44:16 UTC 7 years ago

You're wildly sweet; thanks for the encouragement! I hope I can sustain multifannishness; for the first time in my life, I want to be writing in all my fandoms--DS, QAF, DZ, SGA, HCL--and, er, maybe House--simultaneously. (I can't say, honestly, that I feel like writing any TS, but other than that? I've got story ideas for all of them, so I'm just knocking wood that I can keep this juggling act going!)

[info]wishbyspirit

March 7 2005, 04:47:06 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, so many moments to love to bits! I loved the entire first sequence and Sheppard's, "hand of power" comment = classic. I can actually visualise this entire fic perfectly. Thank you! :-)

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:45:21 UTC 7 years ago

Thank YOU--I really appreciate your comment about being about to visualize it. That's a great relief to me; this is my first shot at these characters in this fandom, and so I'm half-testing myself, trying to see if what I see in my head maps out for other people on the page. So thanks a LOT.

[info]kiranovember

March 7 2005, 05:07:27 UTC 7 years ago

Just Like Christmas

Very good. Loved the Hand of Power. And the graceful leap.

I've got at least one more ep on tape to watch tomorrow - I wish she'd saved the first ep. Oh, well, reruns.

[info]cesperanza

March 7 2005, 06:46:01 UTC 7 years ago

Re: Just Like Christmas

Yeah, I'm sucking down eps like a mad thing myself. I'm glad you liked this; it's a first shot, but I'm glad it's in the right zip code!

[info]malograntum

March 7 2005, 11:25:32 UTC 7 years ago

This is awesome--the characterization is wonderful all around. Making them, ahem, friendly neighbors also adds a whole other layer to John and Rodney's apartment-hunting in "Before I Sleep." ;)

Most of my favorite lines have been mentioned in the other comments already, but I love Rodney's unfaithful hussy of a pet:

Fucking cat. Couldn't trust 'em. One can of tuna fish, and they were yours for the taking.

(And I know you totally don't know me, but can I just say that I've enjoyed your work quite a lot in other fandoms and was most happy to see you appear in this one? And that if you did, in fact, also start writing House, as mentioned in a thread above, that would RULE? ...Okay, I'm done now.)

[info]cesperanza

March 10 2005, 07:28:28 UTC 7 years ago

I've got two House stories in the queue, so hey. *g*--hopefully they come off and make it out of the lab. And thank you for your kind words on this story; I'm always terrified of first stories, cause I need to wiggle around a bit, find my feet. I appreciate the reassurance that this sounds even vaguely right!

[info]coreopsis

March 7 2005, 20:02:50 UTC 7 years ago

I'm sure it's been mentioned a hundred times but Rodney going over the railing? So funny, so Rodney.

Also, I loved John rolling over and falling dead asleep. "Excellent". hee.

[info]cesperanza

March 10 2005, 17:35:26 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you!--I find John, hm. Wonderfully assuring, like a really relaxed person in himself. It's one of the things I like best about him; he strikes me as wonderfully un-neurotic! And poor Rodney doesn't strike me as an "anyone for tennis" guy in the best of circumstances, let alone dead tired. *g*

[info]thecomfychair

March 7 2005, 22:42:34 UTC 7 years ago

the whole story was great but this lines:
Rodney would have put out a bucket of inhalers and a sign saying, "Deal with it," but Beckett apparently felt that each case needed the personal touch.

made me crack up so hard. two thumbs up.

[info]cesperanza

March 10 2005, 17:36:24 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you, thank you!! It's my first time, so I'm very grateful for the assurance that I'm on the right scent!

[info]indybrat

March 22 2005, 12:14:01 UTC 7 years ago

You don't even want to know how loudly I squeed when I saw you were writing SGA. and um that makes me sound kinda stalkergirl fan doen't?*g* Anyway I LOVE, LOVE your dS stuff and I've totally flipped for the Sheppard/McKay so when I saw you that you'd written it, I was like yay there's a fic that is sure to be good. and it's fabulous. there are too many bits I love to pick them out.

[info]cesperanza

March 23 2005, 03:49:12 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks so much--it's my first, very bitty attempt; I haven't found my feet yet (hell, I haven't seen all the episodes yet!) but I'm definitely intrigued and plan to write more!!

[info]sisabet

March 25 2005, 21:41:24 UTC 7 years ago

So I am not supposed to even be here right now. Right now I am supposed to be at work and diligently doing whatever it is that they pay me to do, but I was also bored and on hold and just kind of skimming the archives to plan what I am going to read tonight and I saw this and thought "Well, I'll just take a peek" and these things never work themselves out as I just couldn't stop reading and before you know it, I have read the entire thing (and I am STILL on hold) and I'd feel guilty about it cause of the entire "at work" thing but it is balanced by the entire "on hold" thing and now I am just babbling.

What I really want to say is that I enjoyed this from beginning to end. It made me want to stay on hold with Geico for forever.

What I really enjoyed was that manic awakeness that you captured - that total inability to just stop because there is still so much to do and and see and it just felt so very Rodney to me. And then there was the balcony and talking coffee pots and adorableness and I was also happy with that. I'm just pretty damned happy right now, so thank you.

[info]cesperanza

March 25 2005, 22:46:41 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you!--it was my first and so far only attempt at these guys, but I am wildly intrigued by them and eager to start mapping out the sandbox! Whee--fun!

What I really enjoyed was that manic awakeness that you captured - that total inability to just stop because there is still so much to do and and see and it just felt so very Rodney to me.

*cough*--Research. Not that that has ever happened to me. I am as calm as the open sea, myself. *g*

And you're so welcome--whee, hey, we're in a fandom together! It's a new dawn!

[info]cathexys

March 27 2005, 17:10:50 UTC 7 years ago

this was wonderful...if they got together that first night, it *only* could have happened this way :-) i love the way rodney's trying to decipher john's words, the way he realizs that their sleeplessness has fundamentally different origins, the way you gave us brief glimpses of several of the relationships...and the talking coffee machine that only john can silence :-)

thank you!!!

[info]cesperanza

April 6 2005, 01:00:28 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks!--meanwhile, I keep meaning to write you and say that your disk was waiting for me at my office when Ig got back from easter break! I look forward to watching it!!

[info]cathexys

7 years ago

[info]sinden

March 28 2005, 00:33:44 UTC 7 years ago

Just perfect. Rodney would so be totally enthralled with everything about the city and not paying attention to time, just what was in front of him. And the talking coffee machine cracked me up. :)

[info]cesperanza

April 6 2005, 00:59:43 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you so much for the encouragement! I wrote the one story and then got derailed and busy and such, but I'd really like to write more SGA, so the kind words are very appreciated!!

[info]northernveil

May 2 2005, 07:57:39 UTC 7 years ago

Lots of great new toys, oh yes. Love it.

A bit more "real" than some other stories I've read so far. Excellent!

[info]cesperanza

May 3 2005, 21:07:13 UTC 7 years ago

Thanks! I'm only just starting here, but I appreciate the encouragement! (Already there's tons of fabulous fic out there, yay!)

[info]out_there

June 22 2005, 02:48:24 UTC 6 years ago

Lot of great new toys here on Atlantis.

*sniggers* Loved that so much. Such a sweet, sleepy fic.

[info]cesperanza

June 27 2005, 04:09:01 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you! Exhaustion can be very sexy *g*! (Hm. I suppose I must be the sexiest woman alive *g*)
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