Miriel ([info]blueline_baby) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,
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The Birds (PG) by Miriel

Title: The Birds
Author: [info]mardahin
Rating: PG
Author's Note: Um, so this didn't go at all where I had expected it to. I am very interested to hear what anyone thinks of it. It's a look at an aspect of the Genii life that I'm not sure anyone has poked at, yet, as well as an unexpected look into Kolya's motivations.

ETA: Mild correlation with Irresponsible, but nothing major and certainly nothing you'll recognize if you haven't seen the ep (which I haven't; I was informed second-hand).



For as long as anyone can remember, the Genii have lived underground. They may walk in the sunshine on those days when the Ring of the Ancestors awakens, but they live underground. It is where they laugh, and sing, and truly smile. When they smile at all, that is, which isn't often.

They live underground, because theirs is a legacy of betrayal that stretches back more than ten thousand years. Back to the day when the message came from the Ancestors that help would not be arriving as promised. The Genii were too few, the Ancestors said, and scattered between too many worlds to defend effectively; the resources for the war would be better used elsewhere. So the Genii did what they did best, and persevered. For their efforts, they were very nearly extinguished.

The pattern was repeated again and again over the years - first the Shinaak, then the Hoffans, and by the time the Kitar withdrew their promised allegiance, the Genii had ceased to be surprised. Alliances were made to be broken; this was the the truth that the Genii learned at the cost of countless lives.

When the Athosians appeared through the Ring of the Ancestors, the Genii offered nothing but what could be seen upon the surface. They spoke not about resisting the Wraith or the city that they struggled to rebuild deep within the heart of their world and the hundreds who sheltered there while they worked. The Athosians seemed content with that; they were a simple people themselves, by all appearances, and asked for nothing more than Tava beans in exchange for very high quality leathers. In time, relations between the two cultures progressed to something approaching 'friendly, but distant', and all was as well as could be in a galaxy ruled by the Wraith.

Underground, the Genii used the new leather to make better gloves for the workers who tunneled ever further to expand the hidden city. For the welders who worked to strengthen the supports that had failed one or ten or two hundred years before. A year after the next major culling hit, the city was deemed finished and the power levels sufficient to support the current population. The survivors flocked to the safety represented by walls of stone and metal, glad of something that could once again be called their own. In keeping with the need for secrecy, every citizen would serve a spell on the surface. They would grow the food that was needed to feed those below, and they would maintain the image that had been so painstakingly crafted.

There was one family who did not set foot upon the surface, tied instead to the rock in a way that few could understand. They were the bird keepers, those who tended the small lives that insured so many others. A strange breed of exile within their own society, they knew not the light of the sun or the touch of the stars; their lives were contained within the flicker of torches, the songs of the birds, and the endless prayers that the songs never stop. The birds were, like the Genii people themselves, descendants of survivors who had crawled from the rubble of that first horrific culling. They, like their ancestors, stood guard over their human keepers in the endless black of the tunnels and never complained.

Every once in a while, one of them would return to the city looking for a spouse, and decide to remain among the people that they guarded so fiercely from such a distance. The last to take the journey to the city was a boy named Acastus.

Marked as an outsider by the paleness of his skin, he struggled desperately to find a place in the light of the deep city, in that strange mixture of above and below. When his turn on the surface came, it was marked by pain as his skin adapted to the harsh light of the sun, but he survived it just as he had survived the cave-ins that struck in the outer tunnels. Despite his status as outsider-within, he toughened and progressed well through the ranks of leadership; soon enough, the lessons of allegiance and betrayal flowed within his veins as surely as did the blood of the keepers.

An unspoken rule amongst the Genii is that the keepers do not leave their world. A few may leave the tunnels - all leave for a time, to seek spouses, but most for no more than a few months - but none may leave the safety of the homeworld. It is deemed bad luck, for the secrets of the birds to venture beyond the Ring of the Ancestors. By the time he became a leader within the military, Acastus Kolya's past as a keeper had been all but forgotten, and no one questioned his right to lead a strike team after those who had inevitably betrayed them.

Then came the culling, and the earth trembled and shook in a way that it had not within the living memory of the Genii. Those on the surface died; those underground survived, or nearly all. In the confusion, there were a handful of casualties that were not discovered until almost a year later - outliers, who lived outside of the immediate boundaries of the city. Upon their discovery, many of the more traditional Genii took the deaths as a sign of things to come, though none could agree upon what that was.

It was the day Ladon Radim proclaimed himself Chancellor of the Genii that the last bird died, a victim of neglect in the wake of its keepers deaths. One year later, to the day, Acastus Kolya died with the sound of birdsong in his ears, on a planet without a single man-made cave.

~ Finis ~

Tags: author: miriel, challenge: villains

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[info]nataliadarimini

March 15 2007, 02:07:28 UTC 5 years ago

Oh, I liked that quite a bit.

[info]blueline_baby

March 15 2007, 02:09:28 UTC 5 years ago

Thanks!

[info]commodoremarie

March 15 2007, 02:47:29 UTC 5 years ago

Very thought-provoking! I like the way you handle the Genii - as a diverse, yet united people with a very specific outlook, a very flavored background. Any chance you're going to continue with the backstory of the birds? I loved the way you set this up to bring out Kolya.

Oops, is there a missing word (of) in this? - "a victim of neglect in the wake its keepers deaths."

Sorry I missed you online! Was taking a break to watch an episode of The Wild Wild West with [info]mbaokea. Shall be on later, though!

[info]blueline_baby

March 15 2007, 03:00:35 UTC 5 years ago

Thanks! Didn't have a chance to grab anyone on beta for this, so I knew there might be things I'd miss.

Dude, I have a hard time not continuing with backstory, once I've established it, so I'm sure it will crop up again. And in regards to Kolya, he always had that flavor of an "in" outsider, you know? The Genii fascinate me, because they're a prime example of the difference in basic morals between Pegasus and Earth. I like playing with them, looking at hows and whys and where certain practices might have come from. And, you know, any group that has been working underground for any prolonged period of time has had to use some kind of poison gas detection. Canaries were the bird of choice in the coal mines; I can't believe the Genii didn't have something similar. As the generations passed, what was once a practical mechanism became ritualized.

RE: The birds themselves. There were three interpretations of the 'symbolic' or 'prophetic' meaning of the death of the birds:

1. It was a sign that the Genii would soon fall in the wake of their guardians (see also: Ravens & the Tower of London).
2. It was a sign that the old ways were dying.
3. The birds had died because they were no longer needed, and the Genii would soon walk in the sunlight again without fear.

No worries. I'm sure we shall run into each other ^_^

[info]ladyholder

March 15 2007, 03:12:17 UTC 5 years ago

Oh, now that is interesting. And disturbing. Nice.

ladyholder

[info]blueline_baby

March 15 2007, 04:15:45 UTC 5 years ago

*G* Isn't world-building fun ??

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Anonymous

March 15 2007, 06:22:44 UTC 5 years ago

"Spoiler Policy: If your story contains spoilers for any episode or season that has not yet aired in the US (currently the last major television market to get new SGA episodes), a spoiler warning should be included and visible outside of the story cut tag."

Check your tags, 'cause right know I'm pretty ticked

[info]blueline_baby

March 15 2007, 11:56:08 UTC 5 years ago

Um, to be honest? I haven't seen the episode I think you're referring to. I've heard a spoiler or two, but that's it, and I take them like I take anything I haven't seen for myself - with a grain of salt. This was written from a "Return Part 1"-forward POV, not an end-of-season 3-forward perspective. I don't view much of anything as absolute canon before it airs in the US, or at least until I've seen it myself. If Kolya has died in 'canon', it's not something I was aware of.

I had the same thing with "The Questioning of John Sheppard" - there was something alluded to in a future episode which I happened to also use in my piece, but the two weren't meant to dovetail, and it was something I'd been considering / sorting out for a while before it was ever mentioned as a spoiler (I haven't seen the referenced episode, either - haven't gotten around to seeing most of the second half of season 3, between one thing and another. Echoes and the two Returns are the only episodes I've seen).

I did it with "Bridges You Cross" - written before Return 2 aired anywhere, correctly predicting how the situation with the Asurans would resolve. It's not a spoiler if you're hypothesizing (also? I commonly end fics with glimpses into the future; several of them have included deaths. As far as I know, most of the people I've written "dead" are still alive and kicking. I'll modify my advert tags, but I think you're going off a bit strong on something that wasn't a spoiler to the best of my knowledge. If I happened to coincide with future canon, that's not actually my fault.

Anonymous

March 15 2007, 17:05:51 UTC 5 years ago

I'm very sorry. Looking back at what I posted, I was out of line here. I was ticked at someone IRL and had no business taking it out on you. Let this be a lesson to me never to post an irrate message written at 2:00am, until I've read it over again in the morning.

[info]missyvortexdv

March 15 2007, 17:17:40 UTC 5 years ago

I don't quite get the bird keepers thing but this was spookily beautiful, well written and an intriguing look into the Genii's past.

[info]blueline_baby

March 15 2007, 22:37:47 UTC 5 years ago

*Because I'm curious* You don't get what about the bird keepers? Why they were significant to the Genii? Or something else? I've got their place in society and significance pretty well fleshed out in my mind, so I'd be more than happy to explain if you can let me know where your questions are.

Glad it worked regardless, though.

[info]missyvortexdv

March 16 2007, 13:03:50 UTC 5 years ago

I mainly got confused where the city was and where the birdkeepers were and how the two related. I thought the city was underground, and it also sounded like the birdkeepers must be for him to be pale (though how would the bird survive like that?) but were you suggesting they were elsewhere underground? It was the location and movements of that didn't come across clear for me. As for the significance, I was thinking it must be rather like the ravens at the Tower of London, signifiers of the survival of their once great people.

[info]adafrog

March 15 2007, 18:41:55 UTC 5 years ago

Very, very interesting. Well done.

[info]blueline_baby

March 16 2007, 17:49:16 UTC 5 years ago

Thanks!

[info]darkrosetiger

March 15 2007, 23:51:03 UTC 5 years ago

Ooh, interesting. I was a little confused about the birds and why they kept them, but reading the other comments cleared that up. I always like Genii backstory, something besides just the Wraith that explains why they are the way they are and what they were before.

[info]blueline_baby

March 16 2007, 17:46:45 UTC 5 years ago

*G* The Genii fascinate me, because they're such a vivid example of a native culture with all of its inherent otherness. The Genii make sense, to themselves, they just don't do things the way the expedition expects - they're working off of a different background, a different basic cause & effect understanding.

And, you know, there's just so much room to play.

[info]druidspell

March 16 2007, 01:23:09 UTC 5 years ago

I really liked this--I got the bird thing right off (being from KY, coal mining is a big thing in certain parts of the state, and I've heard stories about the canaries in the mines), and I like your take on the Genii. (May be more coherent later.)

[info]blueline_baby

March 16 2007, 17:48:39 UTC 5 years ago

Hee! I'm glad someone got it!

*Waits with baited breath for you to become more coherent*
I look forward to your comments ^_^

[info]leesa_perrie

March 16 2007, 19:30:38 UTC 5 years ago

This was good, kinda creepy, but good. Liked the back story, and I thought that the birds probably had something to do with underground gases. Be interesting to read more.

[info]blueline_baby

March 18 2007, 00:41:39 UTC 5 years ago

Thanks! My personal model of the Genii is always evolving, and I use things like this to sort out the hows and the whys and the little things you never think about - glad to know other people enjoy my noodling ^_^

I'm sure this isn't the last you'll see about the birds - once I come up with an idea, it was a way of weaseling into other areas of my life/fiction/etc.

[info]saphanibaal

March 26 2007, 04:39:33 UTC 5 years ago

Oooh, this is pretty.

(I'd have responded earlier, but I was putting this off until it wouldn't influence mine.)

[info]blueline_baby

March 26 2007, 20:32:24 UTC 5 years ago

No worries, and I completely understand - I put off watching Return Part 2 until I'd done my Bridges You Cross re-write, so as not to have my ideas 'corrupted'. Granted, I ended up being bang on for the most part(and the few areas I wasn't, I later went back and did a revision to make mostly canon-accurate (well, up until the story turns left and heads straight on 'til morning)), but I wanted to be able to say with a clear conscience that it was my work and not spoiler-induced.

I'm glad that you liked this; it wasn't at all what I'd intended when I first came up with the concept, but I adore it just the same ^_^

[info]saphanibaal

March 27 2007, 18:23:33 UTC 5 years ago

I don't mind spoiler-induced, but I like to either work from ideas inspired by somebody else from the beginning or work in a sealed room and then see whether parallel evolution has occurred.

With the Genii, I have trouble... it makes no sense (save for the standpoint of familiar actors) for the publicly acknowledged leader of Big Shiny Target to also be the leader of The Whole Shebang. My best guess as to explaining this is that there was some sort of power play behind the scenes in "Underground," where Cowan sped up his timetable for moving to supreme power with the arguments of C-4, airpower, and If You Hadn't Been Going So Slowly We'd Have Blown Them Up Before They Woke. If that went through before the disastrous mission to the hive, he'd almost have had to transfer all blame to the Atlanteans in order to avoid being as swiftly deposed; and assigning Kolya to the Atlantis invasion would have been a double-edged sword that wound up giving him the worst of both worlds, even with the silver lining of a guaranteed scapegoat.

//it wasn't at all what I'd intended when I first came up with the concept, but I adore it just the same//

I love it when that happens; those are often the best stories.

[info]npetrenko

April 30 2007, 02:36:41 UTC 5 years ago

Impressive work.

[info]blueline_baby

April 30 2007, 03:00:10 UTC 5 years ago

Thanks!
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