astolat ([info]astolat) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,

Sentry Post, by astolat, for the First Night challenge.

Many thanks to [info]merryish and [info]resonant8 for giving this a beta pass.
Bates POV, gen, 442 words.

Summary: Sheppard's got Sumner's dogtags, but now Bates has his job.

Sentry Post

Bates has a new CO, a flyboy with a do-not-promote stamped on his record who only got brought along because Weir wanted herself a piece of ass in a uniform and McKay wanted somebody to flip the fucking light switches. Sheppard's got Sumner's dogtags, but now Bates has his job. Secure the city. Keep the expedition safe. Keep Earth safe. Far as he can tell, he's the only one left who's keeping those priorities straight.

Eighty-seven refugees brought in through the gate, complete with personal property; no inspection, no search, just, "Give them rooms, and we'll straighten things out in the morning." By now they could've hidden a thousand transmitters all over the fucking city. At least he's managed to keep a man in the control room the whole time, and the conference room doors have stayed shut tight.

The goddamn party's still going strong, and he's got some damn good men here, but you can't ask them to stand a post all night long when there are fucking aliens at the feeding trough and they've been up for thirty-two hours straight. He's rotated the guys around as much as he could, and thank God he's got Berman and Yeats, who don't drink, and Chastow, who can be trusted not to if he's asked, but they've got to sleep sometime too.

He can see Sheppard moving through the crowd, out onto the balcony; saunter in his step that's never been crushed out by a 40-mile march, clocking hours in the sky instead of miles on his feet. The son of a bitch put a bullet in Sumner's heart, and now he's eating canapes and checking out the Athosian bimbo who probably set them up in the first place. Bates gets a little tight cold satisfaction from that, though; serves Weir fucking right, and now she'll have the pleasure of dealing with the insubordinate asshole she forced on them.

He knows that's not how he's supposed to think. He should be hoping for this to work, because if it doesn't, they're all dead. But he's not that kind of a guy. He's got a job to do and he doesn't need to psych himself up with false hopes to do it. And he may not be able to do anything about it, when, not if, Sheppard fucks up; but he's going to do his best to be ready.

For now, he's got a couple of pep pills in his kit that he doesn't have to account for, and they'll keep him going through the night. He can't patrol the city alone, but he can keep this one corner of it safe.
Tags: author: astolat, challenge: first night

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[info]zortified

March 6 2005, 03:32:04 UTC 7 years ago

Ooo, nice. Very chilling look into his head.

[info]minnow1212

March 6 2005, 04:35:14 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, I liked this a *lot.*

>he's got Berman and Yeats, who don't drink, and Chastow, who can be trusted not to if he's asked<

I liked this especially for some reason.

[info]verstehen

March 6 2005, 06:31:22 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, wow, Bates-centric fic. I didn't think this existed, even after Letters From Pegasus. ;) I'm impressed, especially by your treatment of his issues and professional paranoia. And the pills. That tiny little detail makes the short more than anything; it really shows how driven he is.

[info]cesperanza

March 6 2005, 07:39:23 UTC 7 years ago

I didn't see this before you posted--I like this a lot. We really need to do a "other characters" perspective challenge at some point, because it's amazing to think of Sheppard as a flyboy with a do-not-promote stamped on his record who only got brought along because Weir wanted herself a piece of ass in a uniform and McKay wanted somebody to flip the fucking light switches. WAY cool.

[info]kaneko

March 6 2005, 10:45:21 UTC 7 years ago

I didn't see this before you posted either. Lovely cold, clear voice.

And now I want to see a Miko story!

[info]maryavatar

March 6 2005, 15:32:55 UTC 7 years ago

Oooh, I love this insight into Bates's mind. I'm rather fond of him.

[info]_bettina_

March 6 2005, 15:38:10 UTC 7 years ago

Very nice, I like this look into Bates' head.

[info]thegrrrl2002

March 6 2005, 17:19:57 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, I love Bates here. I love that he doesn't trust John or Teyla and that he's so very pissed. It's utterly believable, and very cool.

[info]misspamela

March 6 2005, 20:41:44 UTC 7 years ago

Nice! Excellent glimpse into an often unsympathetic character!

[info]kageygirl

March 10 2005, 14:46:43 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, this is so well done--this feels just like Bates to me, and he's an asshole, but I totally get why he's an asshole... and I don't think he's wrong. That's so cool. *g*

[info]maraceles

March 27 2005, 16:37:40 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, yeah.

And the hell of it is, Bates is right.

Man, they just got lucky that Shep actually stepped up to his position. For the most part.

[info]sinden

March 28 2005, 00:57:50 UTC 7 years ago

ooh, I really, really like this. It's so very Bates as we know him in the first half of the season -- uptight, abrupt and so used to being under the purview of the straight as nails Sumner. The bitterness about the change in leadership and his suspicions is just perfect.

[info]30toseoul

April 20 2006, 03:52:43 UTC 6 years ago

Damn. I know a lot of Air Force and a lot of Marines, and this rings absolutely true.

[info]meret

April 28 2006, 07:01:32 UTC 6 years ago

This is wonderful! Excellent characterization.
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