Shade ([info]daughtershade) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,
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First Night Challenge By Shade

A little first night Zelenka because I adore him. Thanks to [info]theodosia and [info]reginagiraffe for cheerleading. 975 words.



Osamělý


Dr. Radek Zelenka helped two other members of the science team move some equipment from a hallway to a temporarily assigned lab space. He still wasn't sure who the man and woman were or what specific sciences they studied, but there was no talking as they finished their task. Coming to a new galaxy had been so exciting and awe inspiring that everyone was still a little overwhelmed. The city rising from the ocean had not dampened this spirit at all. Radek chuckled over his internal pun. The surfacing of the city hadn’t completely eliminated their power problems though. Already there were scientists trying to get the naquadah generators to synch with the city's power grid.

Radek itched to go up to the control room and offer his services. He was distinctly curious about the Ancient systems and wanted a look at them for himself, but he knew that Dr. McKay and Dr. Grodin were probably handling it. He'd spoken to Grodin in Colorado before they had left and the Brit was very personable. The descriptions he'd giving of the Ancient find in Antarctica had been fascinating. Dr. McKay, though, was an all together different animal. He'd only spoken to the science group once and from that smug speech, Radek was sure he didn't like the man. From the looks on the faces of his fellow adventurers, he wasn't the only one.

He set down the last box and received a grateful, if powerful, back slap from the man in thanks. Radek pushed his glasses back up and noticed the Australian flag patch on the man's jacket. The female scientist had already disappeared. He wandered out into the hall. A pretty blonde woman was surrounded by people and was yelling over the crowd. She was handing out pieces of paper and requesting everyone come see her if they had any problems. A psychiatrist, he decided and snatched a piece of paper. The room the paper led him to was plain and lifeless. Radek hated it. After the beautiful architecture and warmth of an old city like Prague, the Ancients' modern minimalism was just sterile. Radek threw down his things and decided to look around Atlantis.

The hallways were quiet except for the occasional creaking of the city in the wind. The party had wound down some time before, but he hadn't bothered to stay long. He'd never felt that comfortable in social situations, and he hadn't gotten to know that many people yet. It seemed like most of the team were tucked up in their new quarters or working. He had yet to meet anyone in passing. The military had forbidden any exploration until the area could be declared safe, so Radek had a very limited territory to investigate.

After a while, he found himself in the spacecraft bay. The oblong ships made to fit through the Stargate were interesting. He'd seen that special Major fellow fooling around with one before he'd gone to rescue those that had been captured by the Wraith things. Deep down, Radek had known a new galaxy meant new life forms, but nothing had prepared him for the description he had received of this new enemy. Radek sat down at the pilot controls and stared at the dark panel. He didn't have the gene that would allow him to work the ship, not that he had any flying experience to know what to do with it if he did.

He sighed quietly. There were no other Czechs among the many people that had given up everything for one chance to step across the stars. The hanger bay was eerily quiet. Radek had never felt so alone.

"Damnit why do I have to do everything? I swear that man thinks I'm some kind of miracle worker," an angry voice broke the silence. He listened as it grew closer and turned into a mocking falsetto. "McKay, those Puddle Jumpers may be our only line of defense; maybe you should see if those weapons are replenishable."

Radek turned the pilot's seat to see Dr. McKay stomp up the gang plank into the ship. The Canadian paused when he realized he wasn't alone. They stared at each other in silence a moment before McKay automatically resumed his conversation as if he had been talking to Radek all along.

"I mean, honestly, it's not like I don't have things to do right now. I hardly got to enjoy that stupid party as it was. Is it too much to ask for a few minutes of rest?"

The pause let Radek know that he was expected to actually take part in the conversation. He opened his mouth to reply, but before any sound could escape, McKay launched back into speech again.

"Exactly! Here, hold this," McKay said shoving a touch pad diagnostic display into his hands. Radek watched as the other man began searching the controls and underneath the panel.

"It's in the cargo compartment," he said finally.

McKay looked up at him in confusion and snapped, "What?"

"The control panel, up top. I saw it when I got in."

"Why didn't you say so?" McKay growled and jerked the display out of his hands. Radek got up and followed him past the bulkhead door. When the panel was pulled down it revealed a good number of crystals. "Oh great, would you look at this? 'Just check the weapons, McKay.' Like that's a piece of cake."

Radek sighed, jerked the display away from the other scientist, and started checking relays. He could practically feel the other man's surprise without even looking. He spent the rest of the evening going over the Puddle Jumper systems with McKay alternately complaining and being brilliant. He was never once asked his name, but at least he was no longer lonely. Radek was far too irritated to bother being lonely.



Osamělý is Czech for 'alone' or 'lonely'.

Tags: author: daughtershade, challenge: first night

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[info]byob_kenobi

February 28 2005, 02:00:25 UTC 7 years ago

Yay! This was really nice! I love Zelenka too, poor lonely guy.

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:18:01 UTC 7 years ago

Yeah, I squeed at the little Zelenka/Weir bit last ep, because it amused me. He got so flustered... you can tell he has zero ability with the chicks. It's why he and Rodney get along so well. Hee. Thnx byob!

[info]maryavatar

February 28 2005, 02:04:15 UTC 7 years ago

Awww, Zelenka really is adorkable, isn't he? I really liked this :)

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:19:00 UTC 7 years ago

Yes, yes he is. I love him so. Like Rodney he's not afraid to say what he thinks, but he does so in a sweet way. Not that I don't like snarkattack!Rodney. :D

[info]coreopsis

February 28 2005, 02:17:07 UTC 7 years ago

I liked this a lot. And I love that Rodney made Zelenka too irritated to be lonely. *g*

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:20:16 UTC 7 years ago

I think Rodney makes everyone too irritated to be lonely. It's why we love him so. Thank you.

[info]dirty_diana

February 28 2005, 03:48:56 UTC 7 years ago

Aw, this is nice. Such a true little moment, and dead on Rodney. :)

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:21:13 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you. It's scary how easy it is for me to write Rodney. I keep catching myself and going... "I'm not like that am I?" Hee!

[info]hermitsoul

February 28 2005, 08:46:41 UTC 7 years ago

I can so see this happening. Zelenka has no idea that this is the beginning of a beautiful friendship!

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:22:32 UTC 7 years ago

That's the way friends are sometimes. One of my favorite things about Atlantis so far has been the gradual progression of Rodney and Zelenka's friendship. It's a small thing, but it makes me happy.

[info]tikiaceae

February 28 2005, 08:48:54 UTC 7 years ago

Awwwwww... poor Zelenka and I loved your irritated McKay. :)

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:23:24 UTC 7 years ago

Don't feel bad for Radek, he has a new friend now, not that he'd see it that way. And McKay is always fun. Thanks, wiki!

[info]julad

February 28 2005, 09:37:06 UTC 7 years ago

Eeeeee, Zelenka!! Happy me!!! And I love the last line, it's perfect!

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:28:06 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you very much. :D

[info]reginagiraffe

February 28 2005, 14:08:50 UTC 7 years ago

Yay!!

I like how everyone else is this nameless amorphous mass, and then McKay comes along.

[info]daughtershade

February 28 2005, 14:28:58 UTC 7 years ago

Heh. Yeah, well Rodney couldn't blend if his life depended on it, so....

[info]_bettina_

February 28 2005, 21:58:18 UTC 7 years ago

This is very nice! :-)

[info]daughtershade

March 1 2005, 00:45:41 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you very much.

[info]astolat

March 1 2005, 14:49:29 UTC 7 years ago

I adore this. Exactly Zelenka, with the quiet practicality and keeping to the background, his reserved nature, and a nice contrast to Rodney's brashness. That last paragraph is perfection.

McKay automatically resumed his conversation as if he had been talking to Radek all along.

And hee! I'm totally seeing this.

Do you care for edits? I did spot a handful of minor typos, which I include in case you would like to fix:

exciting and awe inspiring, that everyone was still -- no comma
McKay though, was an all together different -- McKay, though, was an altogether different
A psychiatrist he decided -- A psychiatrist, he decided
line of defense maybe you should -- line of defense; maybe you should
far to irritated to bother -- far too irritated to bother

[info]daughtershade

March 1 2005, 16:11:01 UTC 7 years ago

Thank you, all fixed now. Commas are my downfall. I have a bad tendency to use too many so in trying not to do so, I use too few. Thanks for the nice words as well. :D

[info]kageygirl

March 4 2005, 01:42:26 UTC 7 years ago

Zelenka! Poor Radek--I'm so glad McKay was there to break up the silence for him. In the most abrasive manner possible, of course, but that's Rodney--he doesn't do things small. *g*

[info]daughtershade

March 4 2005, 02:06:41 UTC 7 years ago

No, for sure. Rodney does things REAL BIG. :D Glad you liked it, thanks.

[info]cesperanza

March 6 2005, 06:41:12 UTC 7 years ago

ADMIN

Yo, Shade!!!--could you put "by [Authorname]" into the subject line? It'll save me a TON of time in the archiving! Thanks!!

[info]daughtershade

March 6 2005, 12:38:03 UTC 7 years ago

Re: ADMIN

Done and Done

[info]cesperanza

March 6 2005, 08:15:53 UTC 7 years ago

You know, probably because I imprinted on Julad's Zelenka/McKay, I totally warm up when I see him in fic! Yay, Z! Great story!! (He's also wildly cute *cough*)

[info]daughtershade

March 6 2005, 12:39:03 UTC 7 years ago

Hee! He is cute as a button, and I'm glad you liked it. Thanks.

[info]npetrenko

April 1 2005, 20:14:20 UTC 7 years ago

Lovely story.

[info]palebluebell

November 6 2005, 12:42:00 UTC 6 years ago

This is just lovely. How did I miss this?

Everybody's writing so much and so quickly that it's gonna take forever to get caught up.

*Sigh* Poor me - having to read little gems like this because I missed them in the first go 'round with the noticeboards.

-snerkle-

It's a hard job, but someone's gotta do it, and perfect little stories like this are more than sufficient reason to bother. Thank you.

[info]redbyrd_sgfic

May 2 2006, 02:22:47 UTC 6 years ago

Oh, thoroughly charming! I love Zelenka, and it's such an enormous treat to find a gen story featuring him. (I just found this via the recommendation on stargateficrec.)

~Redbyrd, wandering off to find out what else you've written...

[info]adafrog

May 7 2006, 01:24:40 UTC 6 years ago

Great story. It's nice to hear someone else's POV. In fact, I hadn't really thought about how it would feel to those who never went through the gate to hear about these life sucking catfish that were after them. An invisible enemy to them.
Thanks.
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