Mz. B. Stone ([info]mz_bstone) wrote in [info]sga_flashfic,
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Enclosed Spaces Challenge: Devours the Face by Brighid

Challenge: Enclosed Spaces Challenge
Category: slash (though somewhat obliquely)
Rating: PG-13
Author: Brighid
Summary: The hole goes in but does not come out.


Devours The Face

**With a crunching sound
**the praying mantis devours
**the face of a bee.
-- Yamaguchi Seishi

A soft voice wakes him; he can feel a hand touching him, a wisp of nothing, air and spider silk and ... god. He opens his eyes and a sharp light cuts him in half, pricks from him an involuntary noise of fear and pain. He tries to curl away but his body is not his own and there were...

two blasts, front and side, dropping him, strings cut, utterly helpless. This can't be good echoing inside and a circle of predators gathering around him, lifting him up and carrying him away, and this can't be ... can't be... can't be...

"Major Sheppard!" and there are still hands all over him, touching him shallowly, pulling him free of the winding sheet. "Major, you must be quiet!" and her voice is thin, not *her* voice, no layers of ages and appetite, just simple human fear, but her hands are touching him and he just can't *bear* it, he can't. He tries to drop away, gagging with the effort to breathe, to tell her "no", and then there's a new voice.

"Let him go! Let him go!"

Two hands hold his face and he's looking up into pale blue sky. He knows the sky, how it is open and wide and safe. "Major. *John*. We haven't got time. I promise you can have any number of psychotic breaks when we get back to Atlantis, but. Not. Now!" He follows the voice, the hard hands, only chokes a little when they touch him *there*, where the hole went into him and never came out.

Darkness creeps back and is almost welcome.

)o(

He dreams of teeth, her face and hands breaching the suffocation of his chrysalis, his unbecoming. Her wet red mouth is smiling.

"You will live a long time," she says, her finger piercing him almost delicately, tasting him, searing his nerve endings until they flare sharp and bright. "A very long time," and her smile is full of sharp teeth, like she could eat him right up, as though, oh *fuck*, she is nothing but teeth and want and the hole goes in but does not come out.

"John." Heavy palm shaking him, thin-lipped mouth tight-drawn and the sky is over him again, thunderous and thank fucking *Christ*, distant. His body slides, moves, shifts; somewhere ahead stars streak and lights flare blue-white and there are so many voices. But they aren't the drowning voices, ageless and patient. They are brief and shallow and pulsing.

"John!'

He says, "Hey. R'ny." And then he's wrapped up tight again, so tight he can't breathe.

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John Sheppard wakes up and there's a tube down his throat, an IV line in his arm and a catheter in his dick. He wants to rip them all out; he can barely even stand the blankets over his body, the rub of the hospital gown against his skin.

Teyla has been sitting quietly in a chair. Her eyes snap open and focus instantly. "Welcome home, Major Sheppard. I will notify Dr. Beckett that you are conscious." She rises fluidly, moves towards his bed to touch her forehead to his head but pulls away when he flinches.

He closes his eyes and it's only darkness between rows of red, jagged teeth.

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Rodney is there the next time he wakes up, and he's watching John like he's the secret of dark matter or a pound of espresso roast coffee beans.

"So. Are you going to try being sane for a little while this time?" He reaches over to a hospital table and pours ice-chips out of little bucket into a plastic cup, then leans over John and spoons a small mouthful over his lips.

"How bad?" John asks finally, his voice jagged and rusty.

"Three days, but she wasn't really feeding. Just ... sampling. We, uh, saw the last time." Rodney's mouth twists, and his hands fiddle with the spoon and glass. "It looked painful."

"It is," John says.

Rodney nods after a moment, then spoons up a few more ice chips for John to swallow. Rodney looks like he wants to say something, but he doesn't, he just stirs the ice chips around the cup until they make a shushing noise.

Finally, Rodney leans in and gently presses his palm against the dressing on John's chest, and John can feel the way his hand shakes.

John puts his hand over Rodney's; he does not pull away.

When he falls asleep again, he dreams of the sky.

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Brighid 2005

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Tags: author: mz_bstone, challenge: enclosed spaces

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[info]ex_danvers514

March 12 2005, 02:03:59 UTC 7 years ago

Fuck. That was brilliant. Just, brilliant.

I *loved* this part:

Two hands hold his face and he's looking up into pale blue sky. He knows the sky, how it is open and wide and safe. "Major. *John*. We haven't got time. I promise you can have any number of psychotic breaks when we get back to Atlantis, but. Not. Now!" He follows the voice, the hard hands, only chokes a little when they touch him *there*, where the hole went into him and never came out.

Did I mention this was brilliant? Because it was.

[info]merryish

March 12 2005, 02:16:18 UTC 7 years ago

Lovely as always, B - this is so deep and hard and sweet. So glad you're in this too!

[info]umbo

March 12 2005, 02:31:39 UTC 7 years ago

Brilliant and creepy and fantastic.

[info]verstehen

March 12 2005, 02:32:35 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, that -- That was brilliant. All the imagery of things going in and coming out, just... It works really well.

[info]wickdzoot

March 12 2005, 02:34:54 UTC 7 years ago

Wonderful and painful and skeery and wonderful....

The hole that went in and never came out, God.

[info]wickedwords

March 12 2005, 03:01:34 UTC 7 years ago

Such sharp and beautiful imagery! Lovely.

[info]mmmchelle

March 12 2005, 04:16:50 UTC 7 years ago

Creepy and powerful, yet lovely.

[info]clarkangel

March 12 2005, 04:20:14 UTC 7 years ago

This scared me, but in a good way. And the imagery is just so sharp. I can SEE this happening as if I were watching it on my TV screen. Beautiful.

[info]ophidiae

March 12 2005, 05:11:05 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, man. The imagery is completely disjointed, yet there's a clarity to it that leaves no doubt what is happening. Creepy, powerful stuff. Love the last line, and the promise of peace it holds.

[info]thepouncer

March 12 2005, 05:49:34 UTC 7 years ago

Oh my. This was just breathtaking. Poor John.

[info]alyse

March 12 2005, 10:03:00 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, that was just wonderful. I love the way that you use words, and the imagery is just breathtaking.

[info]_bettina_

March 12 2005, 21:25:12 UTC 7 years ago

Wow! Just great!

[info]kageygirl

March 13 2005, 04:01:24 UTC 7 years ago

This is lovely, how everything's fractured and fragmented and painful, with Rodney giving him little bits of wholeness to hold on to.

[info]wildmachinery

March 13 2005, 04:29:30 UTC 7 years ago

Wow, that was amazing. I can't believe I missed this the first time around.

[info]carolyn_claire

March 13 2005, 07:55:31 UTC 7 years ago

The closeness, there, and the healing, after the horror, is so lovely. *sighs*

[info]history_gurl

March 13 2005, 23:25:45 UTC 7 years ago

Your words make me ache. Wonderful.

[info]teand

March 15 2005, 19:28:53 UTC 7 years ago

Everything you write is poetry. You always touch so deeply...

[info]jenlev

March 16 2005, 00:29:59 UTC 7 years ago

wow, just amazing and astounding. you've made the wraith scary, very scary indeed. and this shows so much about rodney and john; the pain and fear still layered with hope. ::::is stunned::::

[info]resonant8

March 16 2005, 20:29:45 UTC 7 years ago

Wow. [shivers] I might have been more comfortable if this were a little less vivid, actually, but it's all amazingly real.

[info]nematoddity

April 26 2005, 10:14:04 UTC 7 years ago

Agh. And you write things I can see happening on the show, and then I begin to treat them as if they've already happened, and I get confused when they're not part of the backstory already...Man. This was definitely hurtful, and intense, and so very possible, though, with what they're all dealing with, every single day. Man.

*shudders in remembrance of too many close calls already that were filmed*

[info]sffan

April 27 2005, 11:03:48 UTC 7 years ago

And, once again, great job! Just the right amounts of creepy and touching.
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